Even during the busy day at office, I kept thinking about her.
Every morning, leaving her was difficult, after sharing my dreams with her.
I returned late at night. She looked inviting, lying on the bed, patiently, waiting for me.
Dimming the lights, I gently rested my head upon her…...
I love my soft pillow.
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Well this is my first attempt at 55 word fiction. It was more difficult than
writing a poem in my own familiar style., but I loved doing this, & I hope you guys also enjoy it.
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Well this is my first attempt at 55 word fiction. It was more difficult than
writing a poem in my own familiar style., but I loved doing this, & I hope you guys also enjoy it.
The mystery..ohhh..:) u are too good in this one too! It was enjoyable till the last word... Brilliant!!Your first attempt turned to be a too good one...
ReplyDeleteI love my soft pillow too.. Waiting for it to embrace me but time is not permitting me to do so..
I am also yearning for her soft touch! :)
Fab kickoff to your relation with 55fiction, Dada! And boy! Just like in your suspense-filled poems, I couldn't crack the mystery here too... more so there are lesser number of words here which make it all the more difficult to figure out the puzzle :p
ReplyDeleteAhhh come to think of it, even I share the same relationship with my dear pillow and bed! Sighs :D
Keep doling out gems :)
Wonderful, Johna. A full story in just 55 words. The yearning and waiting for the soft touch described beautifully. Are you determined to make me j in each of your post??. If yes, you have succeeded fully. I did not know that I can feel jealous of a soft pillow. But you have the knack of making me feel j of so many things. Well, jokes apart, I loved it and in so few a words, you conveyed your feelings so well. Keep it up. A different style tried by you and again you have proved that you can do anything and everything
ReplyDeleteperfectly. Looking forward to mre
A wonderful kickstart for this form of writing ! Pillows can be damn alluring esp when stuck in a boring office day or when tired... Ahh the pillow !! :p
ReplyDeleteAwesomely written keeping the mystery till the last line !! Waiting for mooore ! :D
Way to go, Dad! Loved the idea behind the post and even the image, that I remember inspired it:) Had great fun reading it! Agree with 'ma completely...You're amazing at everything you do :)
ReplyDeleteLoved it!:)
I found this very enjoyable and funny! At first, I thought it was about a lady and her lover and, I got really surprised in the end. Unexpected! How one word can change the whole gist of a story.
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