This is the full story ( my version ) behind the scene, the scene which was originally created by my dearest daughter in her blog post titled ‘ Provocative’( http://words-that-matter.blogspot.in/2012/02/provocative.html ) (Who also was inspired from the blog post http://i-me-mysolitude.blogspot.in/2012/01/fire-and-ice-55fiction-1.htm)Which actually provoked me to tell the story behind the scene, I found it too tempting to let it go unsaid, so here’S the outcome. Hope you guys like it.
He watched her, walk away
In search of some one new
She had done this before
And she will do this again, he knew
He had fallen in love with her
The first time she had smiled
It was her smile that captured his heart
It brightened her face, like a child
Words weren’t needed to be spoken
He thought she understood his silence
Just her presence was enough
To brighten his days, ever since
Each time she came close to him
His heart would, skip a beat
When she was away, he thought about her
Wondering, when they’d meet ?
Though he was totally unaware
That he was living in a fool’s paradise
Soon all his dreams would be shattered
And he would have to pay the price
Now after the second peg, finally
He seemed to come to his senses
He didn’t know how he would survive this
He had to face the facts without any pretenses
He had now realized
That she was just a little tease
She would always lead one on
And she did this with such ease
He glanced and he saw her
She looked, so beautiful and so cool
She was already busy, casting a spell
On some other new fool
He decided it was time to put an end
To this game she had started
Even though it meant walking away
Lonely, lost and broken hearted
He knew she would always
Remain embedded in his memory
Within the depths of his heart to stay
And he would never really, be free
He put down the glass on the bar counter
And slowly walked towards the door
He had made up his mind, that
He would never come here any more
This was the place where he had
First met & fallen in love with her
Since that day not a single evening
Went without him visiting here
But now he wanted to banish, this place
From his world, for ever more
And forget that, this place, even existed, where
He met a girl, he thought he would always adore
Her smile so warm, yet her heart was, cold as ice
His heart was aflame, with love burning inside
It’s sad, but love is always, left in shambles
When ever these two: Fire & Ice collide
Wow!! This is so beautiful!! A complete composition!! Behind the scene, is complete.. I feel pity for the man..but the last line conveyed the message.. "Love is always left in shambles" So simple and sweet!!
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Ohhh my God!!! Dad, I loved it totally!!! The way you completed what was started by Amo...loved the direction it took...the way you formed the story...I'm in complete awe!:)
ReplyDeleteYou did this beautifully...and I'm glad you wanted to take my post further, actually I'm honored you even wanted to...it's like a beautiful sequel to an unfinished novel :)
I love the woman's character :D The beautiful heart-breaker ;)
Way to go! What a story-teller you are:)
Love you...keep posting:)
What an end to the Fire & Ice stories. Each one is beautiful and yours surpassed all. For one thing, the style , simple yet touching, the simplicity, the feelings, the emotions , the depth of the love and the final decision(even though it was after two pegs). All wrenched my heart and my heart went out to the poor lover who got nothing in return for his love. I remembered something. Some old feeling of mine when I read some letter long ago which made me cry so much. Hope you understand what I am trying to tell you. Loved it. A superb end to a superb starting. Each one wrote a master piece and the crowing glory was your finish.
ReplyDeleteThis is like a cherry on top of a cake, like a crown placed over the entire series of posts that came out with the theme !
ReplyDeleteWhat I put across initially obscurely, leaving behind gaps on purpose, you guys filled it all up so beautifully with both you and sweety outdoing each other. I loved all the versions, particularly yours and sweety's (No bias there :D)
Totally in awe with the way you have portrayed the story. Each word and each line builds it all so very beautifully ! Loved it totally.
thank you for writing this one. I just feel so good that a simple post of mine could lead to a masterpieces that you guys produced :)
Keep writing !
Amo's Fire and Ice sure provoked err inspired quite a few posts, I see :D
ReplyDeleteWonderful, detailed, poetic and apt conclusion to the series. It's fascinating how a concept condensed into 55 words can be interpreted and elaborated in so many wonderful ways!
Good stuff, Dad!