From far away, he could see her
She was standing there firm & tall
And his sinking heart, beat faster
Raising his hopes and all
There was nobody visible
Nor anything else insight
It was a lonely path that he had taken
And he’d walked all day and all night
She stood there all alone
Her arms spread wide open
Inviting him, for a warm embrace
Even though a word was not spoken
In the wind he could see her hair
Was blowing, so wild
In the sun light, he saw
Her skin glowing, like a child
Though she didn’t utter a word
He could hear her softly calling him
It had been a long, lonesome journey
And the sun rays, had scorched his skin
Thirsty, hungry and exhausted, he trudged along
As he reached close, he lay down near her feet,
He found comfort in her presence above him
The shade from her boughs, covered him like a sheet
He was found there, the next morning
Beneath the tall, sycamore tree
He seemed at peace, after a long journey
And the smile on his face, said he was, free
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The last verses took me by surprise... :) another awesome composition!! Kudos to you uncle!!
ReplyDeleteI can see it all...the giant Sycamore tree bending to caress the man as he takes his last breath, it's shade providing comfort all the while...I really could see it all as I read this piece of -I think using the word 'poetry' would be an understatement- art! Trees are again one of nature's wonders and a beautiful Sycamore tree is something I'd really like to get a chance to see some day...
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing way to capture the beauty of nature and at the same time tell a story...Beautiful work!
This journey of you with your excellent play of words are nowhere near the end...So many things to write about and explore, huh Dad?
I think you're amazing at this! Love you :*
Kudos to you, Dada! Using Mother Nature's elements to script such beautiful suspense-filled poems! I admit I didn't know from the starting in which direction to guess, but as the mystery grew, towards the end a couple of words gave away the secret and the picture completed the story!
ReplyDeleteLoved it :) And also Sweety's neat comment gives an added depth to the composition!
Keep writing!
A different post from your other ones. A bit sad in the end but could feel the smile on the traveller's lips. i could sense the traveller's weariness and tiredness. I wanted to become the tree and comfort hi, give him shade and gently sooth him and ask him to take rest for some time. You have the magic of making me feel for the person or charecters you write about. You bering my emotions alive as always. Yes, i woudl love to see a sycamore tree and feel her comfort and the graceful presence.
ReplyDeleteAs usual loved the post totally. Well done John. Keep it up
Sue
Another great surprise!!:-) Liked it so much! What a poetic way to express such a deep thought! The post decribes the sycamore tree so vividly..although I haven't seen it but, I can imagine its beauty from your post:-) The post carries a deep thought and presents it in such a beautifully poetic way...provoked me to remember one my favourite movies, Life is Beautiful:-)!
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely journey that was - Be it reading the poem and reaching the ending lines to know what you were describing or the protagonist's journey itself :)
ReplyDeleteLike Steve said, Sweety's comment added to the beauty of your poem . You father daughter compliment each others writing so perfectly ( happens in almost every post) :)
As far for the ending,
I guess this what is truly meant by resting in the lap of Mother nature !!
Lovely poem and lovelier writing skills as usual :)